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| Author: | Diamhea [ Sat Jul 26, 2014 9:04 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Simple: Quote: This is an amazing release, a rare masterpiece of music, as good as it is hard to get your hands on! The only way I could find this metal gem was via MP3 download. I wonder where in earth could my first TDK recorded cassettes be... Dhak is such an amazing band, sadly a fallen under the radar one and not very known worldwide, though I think in Europe it had a good reception. Won't fly because of that line break. Just condense it into one paragraph or if you do split it, do it like this (and use this criterion for all paragraphs): Quote: This is an amazing release, a rare masterpiece of music, as good as it is hard to get your hands on! The only way I could find this metal gem was via MP3 download. I wonder where in earth could my first TDK recorded cassettes be... Dhak is such an amazing band, sadly a fallen under the radar one and not very known worldwide, though I think in Europe it had a good reception. It seems like you separate only some of your paragraphs correctly. |
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| Author: | DonnTD1 [ Sat Aug 02, 2014 2:49 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
This is more of a general reviewing question: Is having a comparison or reference to another band in reviews really necessary, e.g. "band X has a sound like that of band Y..." or is it acceptable to focus solely on the album you're reviewing, with no outside context? I'm working on a review but have no outside references. |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Sat Aug 02, 2014 3:35 pm ] |
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DonnTD1 wrote: This is more of a general reviewing question: Is having a comparison or reference to another band in reviews really necessary, e.g. "band X has a sound like that of band Y..." or is it acceptable to focus solely on the album you're reviewing, with no outside context? I'm working on a review but have no outside references. That is fine within acceptable context, but don't dwell on it. |
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| Author: | DCCLXXVII [ Tue Aug 19, 2014 6:45 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Curious to see what people thought of my reviews. http://www.metal-archives.com/users/DCCLXXVII They're pretty amateur in my opinion, but I want to know what everyone else thinks. |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Tue Aug 19, 2014 7:28 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
DCCLXXVII wrote: Curious to see what people thought of my reviews. http://www.metal-archives.com/users/DCCLXXVII They're pretty amateur in my opinion, but I want to know what everyone else thinks. Well...they are acceptable. Thus: their acceptance. They are better than the ones you did under your old user name, which had the proclivity to just go on and on, especially when you were fond of a particular work. |
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| Author: | The Infamous Bastard [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 7:10 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
DOUBLE POST. See below. |
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| Author: | The Infamous Bastard [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 7:11 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Hello there, After several years of trying to write good album reviews, I have come to this extent; http://www.metal-archives.com/reviews/D ... ard/326326 I still think I have missed out a lot of things that a good album review should cover. Any tips? Any comments on this above review in particular (except that few vocabularies used are wrong for the given context, I later realized)? (The first paragraph should have been a little shorter IMO, or the other part after the first paragraph should have been a little longer provided the huge introductory context, I guess). I generally listen to albums for around 3 to 5 times before writing a review, and then constantly listening to them more in the process of writing them. |
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| Author: | Erosion of Humanity [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 10:30 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Without even reading it I can say your paragraphs are way too long. It just puts me off and makes it so I don't want to even bother reading, an eye sore really. Try breaking it up a bit, I'd rather read eight good sized paragraphs than four monstrous ones. |
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| Author: | MutantClannfear [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 11:08 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Erosion of Humanity wrote: Without even reading it I can say your paragraphs are way too long. It just puts me off and makes it so I don't want to even bother reading, an eye sore really. Try breaking it up a bit, I'd rather read eight good sized paragraphs than four monstrous ones. Personally, I disagree - I feel like reviews with too many short paragraphs tend to feel fragmented or unfocused. I like it best when a writer just hunkers down and, in one hulking mass, elaborates upon everything they have to say about a particular aspect of the album they're reviewing. EDIT: Regarding this specific review, though, I feel like a lot of the length can be attributed to superfluous things. There's no need to quote an interview from the vocalist just to show that he says "it's not like normal death metal" - that much should be evident based on your musical description - or to talk about what UgraKarma are doing. Also, referencing the Metal Archives inside the review by telling readers to "[not] get mistaken with the ‘Similar Artists’ recommendations" feels kind of awkward, almost like breaking the fourth wall. |
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| Author: | Erosion of Humanity [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 11:21 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Ehhhh, personal taste I guess we'll just have to disagree. Mind you though I'm not talking about having like 15 three to four sentence paragraphs I'm just talking about breaking the long winded ones in half. |
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| Author: | mjollnir [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 11:25 pm ] |
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Erosion of Humanity wrote: Ehhhh, personal taste I guess we'll just have to disagree. Mind you though I'm not talking about having like 15 three to four sentence paragraphs I'm just talking about breaking the long winded ones in half. I agree. That Slayer666 guy is another one that uses a bunch of giant walls of text. It instantly puts me off. This is not on paper, this is reading on a computer screen. Those huge walls of text are not friendly to the eye. |
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| Author: | The Infamous Bastard [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 11:34 pm ] |
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Thanks a lot. I guess, I've developed this habit of writing long paragraphs because of numerous long academic assignments that I have to write. Personally, I don't like smaller paragraphs. MutantClannfear wrote: EDIT: Regarding this specific review, though, I feel like a lot of the length can be attributed to superfluous things. There's no need to quote an interview from the vocalist just to show that he says "it's not like normal death metal" - that much should be evident based on your musical description - or to talk about what UgraKarma are doing. Also, referencing the Metal Archives inside the review (by telling readers to "[not] get mistaken with the ‘Similar Artists’ recommendations") feels kind of awkward, almost like breaking the fourth wall. Hmmm. Noted. I guess I should do a bit of editing again and resubmit it, also due to few vocabulary redundancies lol. Apart from that, is the musical description enough? Redundant information? |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Sat Sep 13, 2014 11:50 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
As noted when I approved this review, the paragraphs are indeed slightly too large, but not so large that we can reject the review on these grounds alone. The descriptions are exhaustive and coherently laid-out, so kudos there. One critique I have is that you should really shy away from mentioning other reviewers, especially by name in your writings. Some may also find your exaggeratedly abstruse writing style flippant and/or self-aggrandizing, but it can be argued that this is the cornerstone of your writing style at this point. Overall, I enjoyeod this better than most, but it definitely has some flaws. |
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| Author: | The Infamous Bastard [ Sun Sep 14, 2014 1:43 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
^ Thanks for the positive criticism!! Diamhea wrote: Some may also find your exaggeratedly abstruse writing style flippant and/or self-aggrandizing, but it can be argued that this is the cornerstone of your writing style at this point. You mean I'm being pretty esoteric and verbose, and that it's a cornerstone of my writing at this point? |
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| Author: | colin040 [ Wed Sep 17, 2014 1:31 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Paradise Lost - Tragic Idol review over here.
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Wed Sep 17, 2014 1:51 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Not sure if it is just an artifact of your copy-paste, but obviously you want to use proper quotations, not /this/. |
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| Author: | Dysentry [ Thu Sep 18, 2014 6:53 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
I wrote a review for Armoros' Pieces a few weeks ago. Now I get the feeling that there're some contradiction between my review and the rating I've given. Could someone give feedback?
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Thu Sep 18, 2014 10:22 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Candidly, this review has more pressing flaws than this supposed dearth of gradation regarding content vs. numerical rating. It is somewhat heavy-handed on the history lessons, and while this has some merit (as there is a relatively worthwhile backstory concerning the record, being unreleased and everything) - but I would personally like to see a more in-depth appraisal of the music itself. This is the band's only full-length release, so lack of material with which to review is not a valid excuse. While I don't place too much merit behind the scores themselves, 98% does seem a bit high, inflated either by some perceived boost due to scarcity of actual product, or by some strange connection the writer feels due to the aforementioned bonding period with the material itself. It is important to not let these 'aggravating' factors impact the final score too much, which should at least make an attempt at being subjective and fair. There you go. |
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| Author: | Erosion of Humanity [ Thu Sep 18, 2014 12:11 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
First and foremost: get rid of all that citing bull shit. This isn't a college paper, if you feel like you need to add work cited then you should just cut that part from your review. The point isn't to quote a bunch of shit other people said (which to me borders on plagiarism, but I'm no mod so whatever). Looking forward I agree with Diamhea in that it does feel a bit like a history lesson (I recommend cutting the entire second paragraph) which is just boring frankly. Anyone who knows the band most likely knows the history and for the rest of us, well I doubt anyone really cares all that much, I sure don't. What's up the the beginning, "Until now"? Does it tie in with the title of your review? Also get rid of the recommendations at the end that just doesn't feel right. Grammatically you look to be fine except towrds the bottom you said "superb" when you should have said "superbly". That's all I got. |
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| Author: | Dysentry [ Thu Sep 18, 2014 7:21 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Diamhea wrote: Candidly, this review has more pressing flaws than this supposed dearth of gradation regarding content vs. numerical rating. It is somewhat heavy-handed on the history lessons, and while this has some merit (as there is a relatively worthwhile backstory concerning the record, being unreleased and everything) - but I would personally like to see a more in-depth appraisal of the music itself. This is the band's only full-length release, so lack of material with which to review is not a valid excuse. While I don't place too much merit behind the scores themselves, 98% does seem a bit high, inflated either by some perceived boost due to scarcity of actual product, or by some strange connection the writer feels due to the aforementioned bonding period with the material itself. It is important to not let these 'aggravating' factors impact the final score too much, which should at least make an attempt at being subjective and fair. There you go. Yeah, I went into this album with wrong mindset ("first review, yes"). The only reason to include the history behind the band was to have a central place where people could look-up info, but that's only interesting for the fans and has very little to do with a review. The rating is too high, the problem was that I was trying to please my thoughts since the album has a high position in my library, no objectivity here. Was it influenced by it's scarcity? Yes, sadly. "Youhavetolistentothisalbumbecausethebandhasnthadenoughattention" Need to fix that too. In terms of the citing, I wanted to create a signature style which sounds good in the first place but doesn't have any reason to be there. Basically, it comes down to deleting 2 paragraphs and focusing more on the music. Thanks guys. |
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| Author: | colin040 [ Sat Sep 20, 2014 9:05 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Final version of this Paradise Lost review I've been busy with the last period.
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Sat Sep 20, 2014 9:53 am ] |
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...and that is accepted now |
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| Author: | jakster840 [ Fri Oct 03, 2014 9:33 am ] |
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Here is a review I wrote about a month ago for Exivious' Liminal. I would love to read y'alls thoughts and suggestions. Thanks in advance! Liminal, Exivious' highly anticipated second offering is a lush and balanced hybrid of metal, jazz, and progressive elements that comes across as quickly and equally as serious in the same breath. This is the first time that Exivious' members have been able to write entirely their own material. The majority of the material on Exivious' debut was written by Tymon who would establish a base line and a sense of direction for each song, then allow his band mates to improvise and their own flare to the music. The result is wonderful melding of styles and ideas, seamless and balanced. Liminal is a grab bag of sounds with tons of variety and equally as much heart. The album is progressive, jazzy, and ambient and places more emphasis on feel than on precision. Each song reflects a different light, but still manages to stay within the same spectrum throughout the album's course. The album has slower, tamer moments like the catchy, but unvaried Alphaform and the soothing, washed number "Movement." It also features less restrained, more upbeat moments like the bouncy and exciting "One's Glow." Quirky moments like "Triguna" (especially its oddly satisfying and discordant finish) and the alto saxophone solo on "Deeply Woven" surface every now and then to add some interesting flavor. Exivious masterfully play their instruments, lay down immersive ambient sections, and maintain a high level quality of production that really draw the listener in. Contributing to this are the absolutely exquisite guitar tones (thank you Axe FX II), groovy fretless bass rhythms, and exciting drum lines. The complex main riff, and accompanying solos, of "Deeply Woven" will turn heads and if that does not float your boat, then the more nebulous opener "Entrust" may be more your speed. Another moment not to be missed is the beautiful opening solo on "Open" which uses a combination of a jazzy approach and an airy, slightly distorted tone to give it a beautiful edge. Closing out the album is the phenomenal "Immanent" which manages to be heavy while still maintaining the grace carried by the other songs. The cord progression coupled with the double bass from the drums at the end of "Immanent" really seals the deal though and ends the record on a mysterious high note. Adventurous, eclectic, and cohesive, Liminal stands alone against other progressive metal albums as a truly diverse and solid album. This time, each band member to contribute stylistically to the overall sound. This unity of direction, above all other aspects, gives Liminal the foundation for its distinct sound. Exivious have added yet another brilliant gem to their portfolio rife with undeniable character and infinite nuance. My favorites songs are “Triguna,” “Open,” and “Immanent.” |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Fri Oct 03, 2014 11:42 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
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I find few problems with this. The only deficiency that really stands out to me is the structure of the third paragraph, which shoots through a number of tracks in a somewhat mechanical manner. That can probably be restructured in a more appealing way. |
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| Author: | Twi_inatrix [ Sat Oct 04, 2014 7:17 pm ] |
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Like a retard, I managed to miss this thread and bumble into submitting my review before discovering this. Oh well, at least I can still ask for criticism here while it's in waiting. Hopefully it's not reject material! Acid Bath - When the Kite String Pops Score: 85%
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| Author: | psiguen [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 12:55 pm ] |
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Me tenéis hasta los cojones con vuestras mierdas. Si escribo Portuguese es incorrecto, pero ahora tengo que capitalizar spanish y mexican... Mis reseñas están bastante mejor escritas que algunas publicadas Y no, no pienso escribir esto en inglés. Estoy harto de ciertos moderadores (no daré nombres, no sea que me baneen...). Qué miedo, por cierto... |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 12:59 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
psiguen wrote: Me tenéis hasta los cojones con vuestras mierdas. Si escribo Portuguese es incorrecto, pero ahora tengo que capitalizar spanish y mexican... Mis reseñas están bastante mejor escritas que algunas publicadas Y no, no pienso escribir esto en inglés. Estoy harto de ciertos moderadores (no daré nombres, no sea que me baneen...). Qué miedo, por cierto...
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Twi_inatrix: Overall coherent and detailed, but your fourth paragraph devolves into a track-by-track rundown that is universally frowned upon for anything longer than an EP. Honestly, I would have probably rejected it and asked you to fix that section, but it is done better than most, and the rest of the review is good. |
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| Author: | Wilytank [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 2:24 pm ] |
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psiguen wrote: Me tenéis hasta los cojones con vuestras mierdas. Si escribo Portuguese es incorrecto, pero ahora tengo que capitalizar spanish y mexican... Mis reseñas están bastante mejor escritas que algunas publicadas Y no, no pienso escribir esto en inglés. Estoy harto de ciertos moderadores (no daré nombres, no sea que me baneen...). Qué miedo, por cierto... Google Translate wrote: I you have until the balls with your shit. If write Portuguese is wrong, but now I have to capitalize spanish and mexican ... My reviews are much better written than some published And no, I'm not going to write this in English. I'm sick of certain moderators (I will not give names, lest baneen me ...). Scary, indeed ... Quote: I you have until the balls with your shit.
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| Author: | MutantClannfear [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 4:11 pm ] |
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He's saying "You have me up to my balls with your shit." Not that that's much better. psiguen: Pienso que ahora estás bloqueado, pero si lees esto, quien te dijo que no escribas la "P" en "Portuguese" con mayúscula estuvo equivocado - en inglés, las iniciales de los nombres de todos los paises se escriben en letras mayúsculas. Disculpe por mi mal español. |
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| Author: | Metantoine [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 4:43 pm ] |
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He's been banned already, maybe you're used to ignore diamhea's gifs lol. |
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| Author: | MutantClannfear [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 4:45 pm ] |
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Am I supposed to take those GIFs seriously? Anyways, I was just giving him some helpful English orthographic tips for the future!
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| Author: | DCCLXXVII [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 4:47 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
I thought there was a tacit agreement to ignore them... |
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| Author: | Twi_inatrix [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 8:32 pm ] |
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Diamhea wrote: Twi_inatrix: Overall coherent and detailed, but your fourth paragraph devolves into a track-by-track rundown that is universally frowned upon for anything longer than an EP. Honestly, I would have probably rejected it and asked you to fix that section, but it is done better than most, and the rest of the review is good. Thanks for looking at it! I was worried a bit about that section, but decided to leave it as is because it seemed concise enough that it felt like more of a slightly more detailed description of the album's tone. I'll try to avoid it completely next time I write something. |
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| Author: | psiguen [ Mon Oct 06, 2014 8:40 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Yes, I have been banned. But I explained things to HellBlazer and Diamhea, and they lift the banning. Mutantclannfear, I knew I was right with capitalization on nationalities and languages, thank you anyway I knew Portuguese, Spanish and Mexican were correctly written in capitals. That's what I remembered from my old school days. However, Google translator didn't translate my post properly... |
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| Author: | Azmodes [ Tue Oct 07, 2014 7:01 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Yeah, they're capitalised. So what was the problem with the rejection(s)? I doubt the mods gave you contradictory rejection messages about that. |
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| Author: | FuckHumanity [ Thu Oct 09, 2014 3:36 pm ] |
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This is my first ever review and it has been rejected twice because as they said: "lacks in musical context and appearance", so I would really appreciate some help here. [size=85]"Human Serpent is definitely a smart band that respects all the offered dignity in their creativity personality. Their debut album '' The Gradual Immersion In Nihilism'' is violent and It genuinely wants to make you feel ''Nothing'', there is no sense of peace anywhere to be found.. Human Serpent kick it off with 8 Master crafted pieces of pure black metal with devotion to the new era of Misanthropy... Guitars range from slow to mid-paced and fast black metal riffs that are very aggressive sounding with some dark sounding melodies and depressive feel, also there are leads present on this recording. The growls are primitively and destructively raw, the drums are guite dynamic compared to most black metal sound and are almost in consition with the guitars.. Bass lines are jugular-pumping and constantly audible, though they are a bit safe in the notation and really just follow the structure of the rhythm guitars, unable to add another level of depth or atmosphere when you listen at a distance. This combination of the guitar with the vocals, the druns and the bass creates an atmosphere that surrounded me with the feelings of aggression and hatred, as well as, depression and sadness. This is black metal in the vein of the very old tradition of Skandianavian and Greek sound, but I really liked the way they built a solid personality.. As far as the production is concerned, it has a very dark, raw and primitive sound to it. It is Very good. The artwork is a nihilistic portrait and it is like the last piece of the puzzle that connects the band. It is truly fantastic. I really recommend this band if you are looking for new names coming from Greece, it is a must-listen for anyone who likes the oldschool Underground Sound.. Overall this is a nihilistic album, not boring, raw, and quite different. Recommended Tracks: All Highlight Tracks: ''The Gradual Immersion In Nihilism'' And ''Chapel Of Bones''" Human Serpent - The Gradual Immersion In Nihilism Title: Homage For Misanthropy Grade: 92% |
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| Author: | Grave_Wyrm [ Thu Oct 09, 2014 4:03 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
One period at the end of sentences, capitalization only where appropriate, etc. basic grammar notes. Proofreading and spell check mandatory. It looks as though English isn't your strongest language. Is this true? |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Thu Oct 09, 2014 4:20 pm ] |
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The main paragraph paints some passable descriptive pictures, but it is a very mechanical and predictable instrument-by-instrument checklist. Then you scantly touch on the production and call it a day. You should try citing specific sections/tracks to prove some of your points. Don't just say "black metal riffs that are very aggressive sounding with some dark sounding melodies," say that and adduce and example by drawing upon a specific section or a song itself. Try elaborating on your points, and structure the waning half of the review better, as you need proper paragraphs, not just abstract, isolated thoughts separated by line breaks for whatever reason. I would also remove the Highlight/Recommended tracks as that is 1. redundant, and 2. if you write a good review the highlights should be more obvious and don't need to be mentioned at the end. |
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| Author: | MosquitoControl [ Tue Oct 14, 2014 10:26 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The Review Feedback Workshop |
Thought this'd be the proper place to address my review rejection for T.N.T.'s Deflorator, copied below: Raise your hands, all you heshers, headbangers and fist-pumpers that don't see that abbreviation and immediately think of AC/DC: "Oi, oi, oi!" Sounds about right. It's hard to remember all these years and unfortunate genre splits and forks later that the above-mentioned Aussie hard rockers had a noticeable, and sometimes considerable, influence on more than a few "Riff Raff" rock'n'roll upstarts; Udo sure as hell don't sound like Robbie Halford, circa any year. So: T.N.T. Guitarmen Diethelm Baumann and Jorge Hargesheimer are riding a serious Malcolm Young tip: the title track is a slow burning slice of rock and roll damnation, half harmless come-on, half perverted pick-up-and all gravel-throated chorus-that rides a briliant grinding riff that demands volume; "Golden Gate" has a similar feel with a similar anthemic chorus, with a bit more pop. "Back Home," "Born to Loose," and "Friday is Payday," bounce along on the some sped-up dirty blues, though these riffs are slightly faster and far more biting, that would feel right at home on <i>High Voltage</i> or <i>Let There Be Rock</i>; or for that matter on Accept's first couple of LPs or any Krokus LP from the earlier 80s. Where the band drags is in its strange choice to include ballads on both album sides. Yep, two ballads: that's two too many by my humble count, especially given the startling lack of "power," in either of them-"Ride On," they are not. Released in '84, Deflorator is missing the sheen already creeping into so much of that era's traditional hard rocking metal. AC/DC, Priest, Purple, Scorps, random NWOBHM bands (we're talking second, third, fourth albums here; I mean, c'mon, even Motorhead had cleaned up their sound by '83) had discovered the formula for radio success-clarity was the name of that game-and it didn't include much grime or grit; that was best left to the the nascent thrashers and speed metallists and Venom clones reveling in their own filth and sordidness. If it was possible, this was already a throwback to the production of a full half-decade earlier and makes the album that much better; the bass fully rumbles, the drums kick and snap and those guitars, well, they are far from razor-sharp but they still cut to the aural bone. A few slightly notable oddities: Accept's Hermann Frank, fresh off <i>Balls to the Wall</i>, is credited as a "Special Guest" guitar player, but no mention is made of which songs he played on or in what capacity. The album was mixed by the same man, Manfred Lohse, responsible for Tyrant's <i>Mean Machine</i>, Stormwitch's <i>Tales of Terror</i> and Bloody Six's <i>In the Name of Blood</i>, three also far-better-than-average, 80s, Euro-metal-before-it-meant-Helloween/Grave Digger/Running Wild-style-histrionics stompers. The album contains a credit for "Hairstyling," but not one for the vaguely disturbing, and not entirely sensical, cover art. That leaves us about where we started, somewhere in West Germany in 1984, wearing spandex and leather, head banging to an ostensible heavy metal band that came, saw, and conquered little but their own tiny corner of the rock'n'roll universe. Even in the internet age T.N.T. remains in obscurity; and that's unfortunate because <i>Deflorator</i> is an album that has aged far better than many of its contemporaries and is miles better than most of the supposed traditional heavy metal currently being released. Firstly, I find it hard to believe that the reviewer of my review doesn't understand that in the second paragraph "So: T.N.T." is the topic sentence and the double space after and the capitalization of "Guitarmen," is done on purpose; in this case "So: T.N.T." is a framing device used to introduce the subject of the paragraph to follow; and while it's most certainly a trope, it's far less offensive to the reader than most of the pedantic, and wholly unnecessary, prolixity that contaminates many of the accepted reviews. Secondly, to call the second paragraph "very track-by-track," is nigh tendentious libel. The album consists, broadly, of three types of songs; my textual exegesis explains as much. I could certainly rewrite the paragraph but to do so would defeat the purpose of the review: the purpose being a concise explanation of the sound and feeling of the record. |
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| Author: | Diamhea [ Tue Oct 14, 2014 10:30 pm ] |
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Fair points. Okay, resubmit. |
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