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coupdebleus
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 11, 2020 7:58 pm 
 

Well, it's not always about making stuff that's more difficult to play. Variation can come in very simple forms, like changing legato lines to palm mutes, switching dist for another fx, playing the same melody in another time signature, and a myriad of other possibilities that require less virtuosistic displays of chops.

I feel your pain about drums, that's why I decided to go digital a long time ago. When the situation calls (and justifies spending the money) for it I'll write the parts down and get a sessionist.
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Aculeus
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 23, 2020 11:15 am 
 

Please people i really need a critical feedback because i don‘t know if i like my work or not, i used to like it since all friends of mine told me that it sounds great, but since a youtube channel of promotion rejected to upload it i think it sucks and think that maybe my mates just said so because i am their mate.

https://thaxhus.bandcamp.com/album/unleashed-antichrist

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coupdebleus
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 25, 2020 3:50 am 
 

Being rejected or ignored by promotion channels/reviewers/zines happens to everyone, don't fret so much about it.

The first thing that struck me from your music is how awful the mix and general tone of the instruments is. I'm sorry but I've got no softer adjectives to describe it. There are good ways to approach a raw and noisy production, but what you did doesn't strike me as the right one.

The music itself is harder to critique because from what I hear I believe you're going for a bestial/war bm style, which I'm not super knowledgeable about so there's some stuff that might get lost in translation to my ears, but here's my two cents:

There are some nice if somewhat generic riffs in here, but they're getting lost due to the aforementioned issues with the sound.
I don't know whether there's a bass buried in here or if it's an octaved guitar duplicating everything. I would try to make it stand out more by dialing a different tone and giving its lines more interest.
Drums. There's variation in the beats across the songs, that's good; but at the same time they're super stale! Give them some life, copypasting each pattern as many times as needed to fill a section is lazy and the result is boring.
I have an issue with the voice. It sounds grim and aggressive, but monotonous. It's always the same colour, range, and inflections. Either show more variation or dial back its use to keep it from losing impact. Ideally I'd go for both, work on the expression and make its presence feel more deliberate.

As a side note, that quote about the price on the bc page... I don't think anyone cares about that kind of info. You put your album at the price you think is worth and the buyers will decide whether that's right or not, but the thought process behind the decision is irrelevant.
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Niklas Sanger
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 31, 2020 10:30 pm 
 

My band just released our first two singles from our new album on bandcamp and I am interested to hear honest feedback for both the songwriting, performances, production, and lyrics.

https://gallowshymn.bandcamp.com/album/the-age-of-decadence
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Hollowmusic
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 30, 2020 10:22 am 
 

Kaathe - Illusory Euphoria

About the band KAATHE:
Slovenian Melodic Death metal with Progressive tendecies. Solo metal project by Gedo.
So far the only release is an EP album by the title: "Remnants of A Flame".
As hinted with the name, some songs include Dark Souls themed lyrics, but not all songs.

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Usually, i make longer progressive tracks, but I tried to make a simpler, shorter, more straight-forward Melodic Death Metal song this time.
Please leave feedback, anything is appriciated and it always helps for the future!

The Bandcamp link to the song:
https://kaathe-metal.bandcamp.com/track/illusory-euphoria

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marbo91
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 16, 2020 4:35 pm 
 

Hey! This was purely a project for fun. It's been a while since i wrote anything metal related (usually singer-songwriter stuff) but recently got back into it. I'd like some feedback on the songwriting, and how I can improve this time around. I'm well aware that the mix sux :)

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=xnw67oCTyXc

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Silan
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Joined: Fri Mar 02, 2012 12:46 pm
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 28, 2020 8:09 pm 
 

Hollowmusic wrote:
Kaathe - Illusory Euphoria

About the band KAATHE:
Slovenian Melodic Death metal with Progressive tendecies. Solo metal project by Gedo.
So far the only release is an EP album by the title: "Remnants of A Flame".
As hinted with the name, some songs include Dark Souls themed lyrics, but not all songs.

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Usually, i make longer progressive tracks, but I tried to make a simpler, shorter, more straight-forward Melodic Death Metal song this time.
Please leave feedback, anything is appriciated and it always helps for the future!

The Bandcamp link to the song:
https://kaathe-metal.bandcamp.com/track/illusory-euphoria


Nice stuff mate! Took me a while to actually find your bandcamp. Really love the variety in guitars. Vocals are nice on some tracks, but not all. You seem to go into "bright" or "speech" vocals instead of the "dry" vocals. I can see your lyrical spacing got better as well, comparing your last few songs (like "Illusory Euphoria") to your EP "The Ecstasy Of Death".

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Silan
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 28, 2020 8:11 pm 
 

marbo91 wrote:
Hey! This was purely a project for fun. It's been a while since i wrote anything metal related (usually singer-songwriter stuff) but recently got back into it. I'd like some feedback on the songwriting, and how I can improve this time around. I'm well aware that the mix sux :)

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=xnw67oCTyXc


I liked it, but imho the piano and acoustic guitar were too much in the front, while vocals were too much in the back. Overall sounded like a really positive major song, which is not bad!

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ShaolinLambKiller
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 29, 2020 5:17 pm 
 

marbo91 wrote:
Hey! This was purely a project for fun. It's been a while since i wrote anything metal related (usually singer-songwriter stuff) but recently got back into it. I'd like some feedback on the songwriting, and how I can improve this time around. I'm well aware that the mix sux :)

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=xnw67oCTyXc



enjoyed it overall for songwriting, good driving, and pacing. might have liked the very last section extended out slightly for another 30 seconds maybe but it's good.

mix wise only thing I would say is with the metal guitars adding more volume to give it more weight so it's not just all the other i guess you can say non metal elements. those are important but I always like the driving guitars forefront or at least a bit more so they aren't mixed like an afterthought. But good work.
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marbo91
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 02, 2020 7:31 am 
 

ShaolinLambKiller wrote:
marbo91 wrote:
Hey! This was purely a project for fun. It's been a while since i wrote anything metal related (usually singer-songwriter stuff) but recently got back into it. I'd like some feedback on the songwriting, and how I can improve this time around. I'm well aware that the mix sux :)

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=xnw67oCTyXc



enjoyed it overall for songwriting, good driving, and pacing. might have liked the very last section extended out slightly for another 30 seconds maybe but it's good.

mix wise only thing I would say is with the metal guitars adding more volume to give it more weight so it's not just all the other i guess you can say non metal elements. those are important but I always like the driving guitars forefront or at least a bit more so they aren't mixed like an afterthought. But good work.


Thanks for the feedback guys! Have to agree with the metal elements being pushed back in the mix aswell as extending the last section. Will have this in mind for upcoming songs! Cheers!

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ShaolinLambKiller
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 10, 2020 7:33 pm 
 

cheers and you are welcome.

looked at the locked thread listened, (https://viscousfluiddeath.bandcamp.com/album/indulgence here it is) it's a bit repeatitive for what I'm used to but it's fitting for the style but even then it doesn't evolve that much over the corse of the song. the first song cathedral on that release the begining is some pure glorious vaporware/slushwave that I actually would love to hear more of just that extended. Overall mix is great and fitting, it just doesn't hold my attention as much since I have to be in a particular mood to listen to this.

also have to say the name does not connect to me for what this was. i did expect some more vicious death metal but this is nice. just odd name and logo for the project.
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Korpgud
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 12, 2020 11:52 am 
 

Just released a new grindcore song. While my band isn't listen on MA, I personally consider it death metal enough to at least be posted here.

https://swaermm.bandcamp.com/track/brood-ix

Thoughts?
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ShaolinLambKiller
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 13, 2020 5:10 pm 
 

Korpgud wrote:
Just released a new grindcore song. While my band isn't listen on MA, I personally consider it death metal enough to at least be posted here.

https://swaermm.bandcamp.com/track/brood-ix

Thoughts?



Song writing: I absolutely do enjoy it. there are some a couple of solid death metal riffs and a couple black metal ones. I love the non metal ones with the more chaoticore nature of early 2000's stuff that was so inventive as long as you can remember it it's a 'riff' which I love. it covers a ton of ground in the 2 mins. I would happily listen to a full album of this sort of material. which by this standards i would say anything reaching over 10mins is a full length honestly cause these songs always feel longer than they are in the best way.

production, a cunt hair more guitar. the low gutturals are almost lost at the end. if there is bass it is the Justice for All treatment meaning it isn't there. so I assume it's just guitar drum machine and vocals.

with that. it needs some more low end for more impact. and I assume this is a render down from the mix with no master to boost it a bit more. cause it feels like it could be naturally louder if everything was set at zero in the tracking. but still it's balanced how it is. I would just have to adjust my ears or stereo to enjoy it more. and I don't like polish at all. just seems it could be louder with no clipping.


totally not asked but the name. I like that it's interesting but it's going to be like "oh so you like the japanese band SWWARM band so much you are trying to be them?" so i honestly would change it if it was me. cause at first upon name I wanted to skip and not listen just to that. Aesthetics i do like the old robodog look to what you are doing.

so that's my nickle.
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Korpgud
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 19, 2020 4:27 pm 
 

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Thanks for taking the time, really appreciated!

Song writing - this is obviously the biggest compliment, and I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it. The song is by far the blastiest I have to date. You might wanna check out our previous EP as well, though it's much more on the chaoticore side, as it were. It's 13:48 long, a real long player!

Production - you're probably right. I'm a complete noob at setting sound levels, but I'll work on it more for our next release.

The name - haha, the name is absolutely an hommage to Swarrrm. The ironic thing is I've never even really listened to them, I just like the name. And I really couldn't think of anything, I just sort of went with it. I absolutely see your point though, but I'm not super keen on the idea of changing names. We'll see if I think of something better.

Again, thanks for your input and for taking the time!
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REDNECKATRON
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 29, 2020 2:09 pm 
 

Anyone know what sub genre this would fall under?
https://open.spotify.com/album/5r40cWSl ... O71Aa7Jbmg

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Slayershane
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 31, 2020 3:49 pm 
 

Tell me what you think of my music

[https://vestige66.bandcamp.com/track/the-initiated]

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Airon13
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 01, 2021 11:56 am 
 

REDNECKATRON wrote:
Anyone know what sub genre this would fall under?
https://open.spotify.com/album/5r40cWSl ... O71Aa7Jbmg

It sounds Groove metal or even Industrial to me. It reminds me of Fear Factory, Machine head and that kind of bands (even Ministry), so...
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Airon13
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 01, 2021 12:09 pm 
 

Drum play-through I made of "A través del inframundo-Anubis" from Porfiria 666, my band. (Black Metal)
https://fb.watch/2L005VdnNV/
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Korpgud
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 04, 2021 6:24 am 
 

Slayershane wrote:
Tell me what you think of my music

[https://vestige66.bandcamp.com/track/the-initiated]


The Initiated: It's not bad, there are some solid melodies in there, and it's competently played. I really like the addition of the piano and choir in the intro.

The song has a thick 90's vibe to it, which isn't bad but it's not exactly my cup of tea. It's been done over and over, but I think you executed it well. It's dynamic enough to stay interesting. The solo sounds a bit goofy at times, maybe the scales don't quite fit the chords? Someone more experienced in guitar would have to comment here.

Shadows of the infernal flame:

I like the dissonance you've got going on here. The first guitar melody that seems to go in and out of "tune" with the chord progression. Makes it sound deranged, like a more melodic version of Thorns. The drums sound a bit weird in this song though. Take the part at 5:00 for instance. Is that supposed to be blast beats or just the snare drum on its own? It's a bit hard to tell what's what.

What did you use to record? There's software out there to make those digital drums sound much better. The bass too. A demo with good sound is always better than a demo with bad sound.

Also please fix your bandcamp page!
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Slayershane
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2021 11:50 am 
 

Korpgud wrote:
Slayershane wrote:
Tell me what you think of my music

[https://vestige66.bandcamp.com/track/the-initiated]


The Initiated: It's not bad, there are some solid melodies in there, and it's competently played. I really like the addition of the piano and choir in the intro.

The song has a thick 90's vibe to it, which isn't bad but it's not exactly my cup of tea. It's been done over and over, but I think you executed it well. It's dynamic enough to stay interesting. The solo sounds a bit goofy at times, maybe the scales don't quite fit the chords? Someone more experienced in guitar would have to comment here.

Shadows of the infernal flame:

I like the dissonance you've got going on here. The first guitar melody that seems to go in and out of "tune" with the chord progression. Makes it sound deranged, like a more melodic version of Thorns. The drums sound a bit weird in this song though. Take the part at 5:00 for instance. Is that supposed to be blast beats or just the snare drum on its own? It's a bit hard to tell what's what.

What did you use to record? There's software out there to make those digital drums sound much better. The bass too. A demo with good sound is always better than a demo with bad sound.

Also please fix your bandcamp page!


I appreciate you taking the time to listen and your feedback. Yeah I'm very much a fan of old school death metal/black metal so I was definitely going for that 90's vibe. Yeah, the drums definitely sound amateurish, I programmed all other instruments besides guitar on my Anrdoid with an app called bandlab, so it's not the best quality. But I dont have any legit recording programs so it just had to do for now.

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SpectralRevelation
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 16, 2021 3:34 am 
 

https://dancingshadowstamiel.bandcamp.c ... azure-demo
This is the first full metal song I have written and would like some feedback specifically on the structure and flow since I already know the playing and production is sloppy since it was all in audacity.

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EphemeralHypostasis
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PostPosted: Sun Jan 24, 2021 10:15 pm 
 

SpectralRevelation wrote:
https://dancingshadowstamiel.bandcamp.com/track/the-grey-azure-demo
This is the first full metal song I have written and would like some feedback specifically on the structure and flow since I already know the playing and production is sloppy since it was all in audacity.


Apart from the acoustic sections and the bass solo, I thought it was well written. Good melodic development and riff variations, heavy as hell, and a dark atmosphere. Good material to work with for future releases.

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SpectralRevelation
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 02, 2021 8:29 pm 
 

EphemeralHypostasis wrote:
SpectralRevelation wrote:
https://dancingshadowstamiel.bandcamp.com/track/the-grey-azure-demo
This is the first full metal song I have written and would like some feedback specifically on the structure and flow since I already know the playing and production is sloppy since it was all in audacity.


Apart from the acoustic sections and the bass solo, I thought it was well written. Good melodic development and riff variations, heavy as hell, and a dark atmosphere. Good material to work with for future releases.

Thank you for the feedback and taking the time to listen.

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NulSpiritus
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 07, 2021 7:38 pm 
 

https://nulspiritus.bandcamp.com/track/ ... om-the-sky
Initial release for a prospective project.

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ShaolinLambKiller
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 24, 2021 9:34 pm 
 

Deathroll92 wrote:
Hey guys, would like some feedback on my band's demo in my signature. I mostly got positive criticisims by friends, but I would to have some "neutral" thoughts about it.
Thanks.



thought it sounded good. got the cd in one of those everlasting spew grabbag things. i was glad cause i already knew VoidRot.
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