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HellBentForLeather25
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Joined: Mon Jan 18, 2016 10:30 am
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 14, 2017 12:47 pm 
 

Hello

This is a song i have been working on. I compose all the instruments.
What do you think?

http://vocaroo.com/i/s02J9o5fj3iE

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HellBentForLeather25
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 14, 2017 3:09 pm 
 

Oh sorry vocals is louder in this version http://vocaroo.com/i/s0zaQ3zHcAHO

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HellBentForLeather25
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 15, 2017 1:57 pm 
 

No answers?

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MutantClannfear
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 21, 2017 9:24 pm 
 

Man - there's no easy way to say it, but this is really bad. The choir effect mixed with acoustic guitars sounds goofy. The harsher vocals sound ridiculous and strained and the softer vocals sound saccharine and cheesy, and neither of them are quite in tune. The first metal riff sounds like it's not in 4/4 time, so you need to write the drums so that they emphasize the right rhythm for the listener. The drums also sound too loud during the last acoustic part. There's a lot about this that needs to be fixed.
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MDL
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Joined: Thu Sep 11, 2014 2:12 pm
Posts: 341
Location: Portugal
PostPosted: Tue Aug 22, 2017 8:03 am 
 

Honestly, I liked the instrumental part, but as it has been mentioned, it is not well articulated. You need to pay more attention to the time and the rhythm in order to complement the instrumental correctly.
The vocals, both clean and harsh, lack power and attitude, sounds like it haves no soul or any effort on it, something you should pretty much try to revert and improve.

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RichardDeBenthall
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Joined: Tue Apr 19, 2016 2:46 am
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Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Fri Aug 25, 2017 9:44 am 
 

Sounds like the singer of Rhapsody of Fire decided to do a Burzum style metal project

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