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MetalMerchant
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Joined: Sun Oct 23, 2011 12:40 am
Posts: 36
PostPosted: Tue Oct 14, 2014 6:10 pm 
 

I'm back, fellas. Here's a couple of things I've drafted up recently, and I figures y'all would like to see them. The first is a simple work called Proportionality.

The rate of decay
In my joy in life
Is directly proportionate
To the number of lives
Not yet quelled;
For myself,
I'll construct a hell
In which all of life's ills
(Namely life itself)
Can be rendered well

Shot dead in the street;
faith restored gradually
From the sure ceasing of heartbeats
Back alley captures and cuttings?
Only if I carved a smile into my own face
Could I greaten my current beaming

Where there's a will, there's a way
To cease all troublesome life one day;
My soul directive: the strings of life
Must be frayed;
These pigs still with lives must pay

The Rushmores and Taj Mahals
In time, I deign to dye with death;
What were once monuments to accomplishment
I seek to reform into reminders
Of doing what is best

And a second I wrote like five minutes prior to posting this, A Victorian Sort of Violence.

These sheets,
Crafted from the finest cloth,
Are post-dyed crimson;
This bed chamber
Is fashioned to resemble
An abbattoir

To lie yourself on this
Silk most sublime?
Nay - you will be suspended
Above in a way, in time
Not too unlike that of
A strappado hanging,
And so we'll begin
The coloring of this cloth

Blowtorch to bare colon -
Romanticism dictates a
Placation of all senses
(Though perhaps only to
the beholder)
Behold, now, the methods
by which
I make my many satisfactions
At your many expenses

An exposing of innards -
This Victorian sort of violence
Begets no silence
On your behalf,
Or even on mine;
My own longing sighs
Escorted by your
Laboured cries

The curtains of this
Place of slumber
Will most certainly
Match the drapes
From a color palette made
From extended sessions
Of murder by rape

Only drenched in all matter
Of matter,
Blood, piss and feces alike,
Does this bedchamber
Make a suitable rest for nights;
All components employed -
Relics made from exhausted
And visionless sights

"Now I lay me down to sleep,
I pray the sword your soul to keep"


Tell me what you think, y'alls feedback is always appreciated!

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NEKROHAZERD
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Joined: Fri Aug 15, 2014 9:08 pm
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Location: United States
PostPosted: Sun Feb 15, 2015 8:23 pm 
 

Entombed in suffering

The worlds advancement
to apocalypse
the end draws near
We are in hell
Welcome your primal instincts
eradicate all you know
its all you know
the compassionate left defaced
destroy
we are a virus
our evolution only brings torment
we should just die
for once and all
humanity the race that could have been

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The Ardbeg Wizard
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Joined: Tue Oct 01, 2013 6:57 am
Posts: 950
Location: Netherlands
PostPosted: Mon Feb 16, 2015 3:15 pm 
 

NEKROHAZERD wrote:
Entombed in suffering

The worlds advancement
to apocalypse
the end draws near
We are in hell
Welcome your primal instincts
eradicate all you know
its all you know
the compassionate left defaced
destroy
we are a virus
our evolution only brings torment
we should just die
for once and all
humanity the race that could have been


I sounds like you want to commit suicide.
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bluwarguy
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Location: United States
PostPosted: Fri Feb 20, 2015 12:44 pm 
 

I'm not very good at lyrics, but hey, it's worth a shot. "Ghost of Maiden's Peak" (Blackened Doom)

Chilling silence fills the air.
Waited there for two thousand years.
After long she turned to stone.
Waiting for her love to come home.

Staring at the ocean,
stone eyes glistening.
Standing in her lonesome,
she is listening.

Love was sent off to a war.
And so she stands, filled with mourn.
Though stone, her heart forever yearned.
For he was never to return.

Staring at the ocean,
stone eyes glistening.
Standing in her lonesome,
she is listening.

(Solo)

Staring at the ocean,
stone eyes glistening.
Standing in her lonesome,
she is listening.

She still walks among us.
Ghost of Maiden’s peak.
Standing in her lonesome,
She is listening.
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NEKROHAZERD
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 25, 2015 6:36 am 
 

suicide is for losers.
how did you get suicide from those lyrics.
you must not be into a lot of extreme metal because I would say those lyrics are preety tamed
i wanted to make a song about the evilness and ignorance in humans.
but i had to make it metal

i think if apocalypse ever happens its because humans have brought it upon themselves.
because shit might just get worse and worse.
and i was thinking about animals and our planet. when i said our evolution only brings torment.

heres the song

http://youtu.be/hIGU-JO0zX8

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Opinionated_Metaller
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Joined: Wed Jan 28, 2015 12:30 pm
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Location: Canada
PostPosted: Thu Mar 26, 2015 9:15 pm 
 

This is one I've been working on called "Evil Angel". It's a take-that to the Westboro Baptist Church and how they're distorting religion to spread hate. The title comes from a Louis Theroux documentary about the church where Shirley Phelps-Roper describes them as "the evil angels". I hope I don't write anything that sounds unintentionally cheesy and playground insult-esque. The intended style is gothic metal, in case you're wondering.

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If He is merciful and kind
Why does He hate the outcasts?
If you are taught to love thy neighbour
Why do you condemn instead?

Are you saving the damned or despising those who don't fit in?
Is destruction the only way to punish their sins?

Indoctrinated from the start
Persecute the nation of progress
Harass the mourners, bear the signs
All foretelling our demise

CHORUS:
You will never weaken my resolve (I won't bow down to the evil angel)
This oppression never helps absolve (I won't bow down to the evil angel)
To condemn the outsiders is not the way
They'll disregard all that you say
I won't bow down to the evil angel

Your indignation only serves to discriminate and damn them
The salvationist facade doesn't hide your agonizing ways

You blame disaster on impious natures for your wretched cause
Spread a biased religion governed by outdated laws

When others state their beliefs
You cruelly force yours upon them
A loving God hates a sinful land
Say the followers of one judgmental man

CHORUS

(spoken-word section)
We are firmly against your persecution. We do not call others "sinful" just because they do not fit the mold of what we believe to be morally right. There comes a time when people must embrace the progression of social values and stop living in the past. By stating this, we acknowledge that you are likely to condemn us to an afterlife in Hell. But we will not pay any attention to what you tell us. Once again, we refuse to bow down.

(instrumental break)

Agonize
Discriminate
Persecute
Indoctrinate

The once moral message is now tainted
And it's all because of you

(instrumental break)

CHORUS

I won't bow down to the evil angel

I won't bow down to the evil angel
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insectoid
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Joined: Thu Apr 09, 2015 7:19 am
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 10, 2015 6:12 am 
 

hiya, This is an exercise in writing a dynamic type of libretto to a metal song.

Theme: a hunt for a rogue agent from the hunter's perspective.

Spoken word bits (in italic) have been extracted from old and new documentaries.

the song: https://soundcloud.com/q-p-10/nuance

the words:

A Moral Nuance of Coding Stealth

They are seemingly decent citizens
With honest occupations
How does one recognise them?
Perhaps one doesn't
Maybe they shop at your shop
Travel in your train
Live in your street
And why do we do it?
It's not so difficult to answer


I'm making sense of random signs
Waiting for the hole in a perfect plan
Bent another rule and ruined a life
Lurking on the roof
Under flickering streetlight
Never come back
I told you never come back
I told you never never never never
Ever come back
Decision has been made to erase your file
Careful where you tread as I'm hunting you down

We are constantly assessing our agents
Constantly questioning what they're saying
Making sure we're still confident in their access
In their motivations and their suitability
That we can trust them

Yeah, run away
Another hemisphere
And lose the tail
Before we give you nightmares

I pieced enough together
To find what went wrong
You didn't kill the target
Because you fell in love
You turned some insiders
To cover your escape
You had a plastic surgery
Oh, please give me a break

Never come back
I told you never come back
I told you never never never never
Ever come back
Decision has been made to erase your file
Careful where you tread as I'm hunting you down

Well, I'm not going to go into operational details
About these things.There were good reasons for that
And clearly this was something that went wrong
And sometimes operations do go wrong
Whereas actually such failings are very rare
In the operations that intelligence agencies conduct


Yeah, run away
Another hemisphere
And lose the tail
Before we give you nightmares

I pieced enough together
To find what went wrong
You didn't kill the target
Because you fell in love
You turned some insiders
To cover your escape
You had a plastic surgery
Oh, please give me a break

And the people involved
The people like this
The average men
For that is what they seem
Security men would call them source
For that is what they are
Sources of secret information
Everything they do, everything they say
Seems perfectly normal except for that odd thing
And even this, seconds later
Might seem to be unthinking work of a child
That is to everyone except this man


You're mine now
You dug your grave well
A moral nuance of coding stealth
You're mine now
You dug your grave well
A moral nuance invited death
Gave you away
Your desperate poem cipher
You thought I would not crack
You're mine now
And that's where story ends
In peril and haste
I twist your neck

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insectoid
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 10, 2015 8:22 am 
 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3Bulqe4OlWQ my lyric video to another song. Enjoy.

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InThyKingdom
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Location: Bulgaria
PostPosted: Mon Jun 08, 2015 3:49 am 
 

Melo-death-black band (a lot of Dissection inspired riffs) is looking for someone to join our legion "supplying" us with lyrics :) Anyone interested please get in touch with me on PM :)
Here you can listen to one of the raw instrumentals:
Historian

Regards!
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Harlequin_159
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Location: Australia
PostPosted: Thu Jul 30, 2015 9:07 am 
 

A short set of lyrics, based off Plato's' philosophies, that i've made for an upcoming black metal project


Above our sphere
Our plains so vast,
Lies a world
Of future and past

A sea of idea
Of thought and form,
A world filled with nothing
From where all is torn

I see our earth
Reflected in these stars,
Their shining beauty
Also is ours

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Megrimmtroll
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Location: Brora Scotland
PostPosted: Thu Aug 06, 2015 4:50 am 
 

This song was built over musically slowly, then added lyrics as a last thing.

Joulupukki Sled

Midwinter black
Midwinter dark
Midwinter snow
Joulupukki sled
December time...

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baconboom
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Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2015 2:07 am 
 

These are some lyrics I wrote for DSBM song so there kinda supposed to be melodramatic. Anyway I'm interested to hear any comments on them, positive or negative.

Pestilence prevails
Bleakness consumed
The most sickening memories exhumed
Demons come
Never go
My life
Away I throw!
Fate wraps it’s thorns around my neck,
Faith stabs it’s horns into my back! (2)
A life worth losing
A mind worth concealing
Torn apart
By this wretched feeling
Death, I yearn for
Bittersweet pity
I earn of course
Fate wraps it’s thorns around my neck,
Faith stabs it’s horns into my back! (2)
Weak, feeble and dying
Dead, crying and lying
I scream in pain
All suffering in vain
A blade offers temporary release
But still this pain won’t cease
But still I endure this mountain of mournfulness
But still I carry on through this desert of sorrows
For my time is not now
Though I yearn for it to be
Finally through blackened eyes I see.
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CorpseFister
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 18, 2015 1:11 pm 
 

^Pretty generic. And I dunno what sort of vocal style you are using but with the typical WWAAAHHHRRRRR of DSBM you probably don't need to worry about rhyming much, but go with whatever you're feeling I suppose.

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baconboom
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Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Tue Aug 18, 2015 1:38 pm 
 

CorpseFister wrote:
^Pretty generic. And I dunno what sort of vocal style you are using but with the typical WWAAAHHHRRRRR of DSBM you probably don't need to worry about rhyming much, but go with whatever you're feeling I suppose.


I was kinda going for a general DSBM vibe, but the feelings were indeed genuine at the time. The vocals are kinda part spoken part shouted. Actually here's the song with lyrics: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IY3kFLnpEm8
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CorpseFister
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 18, 2015 6:03 pm 
 

Oh I don't doubt the sincerity of the feelings, they just aren't terribly evocative or original. They aren't bad or anything, and besides I don't think too many people listen to DSBM for the lyrics.

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baconboom
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PostPosted: Wed Aug 19, 2015 5:54 am 
 

CorpseFister wrote:
Oh I don't doubt the sincerity of the feelings, they just aren't terribly evocative or original. They aren't bad or anything, and besides I don't think too many people listen to DSBM for the lyrics.


Yeah I get what you mean. It's just the usual DSBM doom and gloom lyrics. But yeah I doubt to many people are going to pay to much attention to the lyrics. Anyway thanks for the feedback! :)
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Harlequin_159
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Location: Australia
PostPosted: Tue Aug 25, 2015 10:44 am 
 

baconboom wrote:
These are some lyrics I wrote for DSBM song so there kinda supposed to be melodramatic. Anyway I'm interested to hear any comments on them, positive or negative.

Pestilence prevails
Bleakness consumed
The most sickening memories exhumed
Demons come
Never go
My life
Away I throw!
Fate wraps it’s thorns around my neck,
Faith stabs it’s horns into my back! (2)
A life worth losing
A mind worth concealing
Torn apart
By this wretched feeling
Death, I yearn for
Bittersweet pity
I earn of course
Fate wraps it’s thorns around my neck,
Faith stabs it’s horns into my back! (2)
Weak, feeble and dying
Dead, crying and lying
I scream in pain
All suffering in vain
A blade offers temporary release
But still this pain won’t cease
But still I endure this mountain of mournfulness
But still I carry on through this desert of sorrows
For my time is not now
Though I yearn for it to be
Finally through blackened eyes I see.


I honestly think these are a cut above the typical DSBM lyrics, something about the rhyming as well as the chorus just really sits well with me

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baconboom
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Location: United Kingdom
PostPosted: Tue Aug 25, 2015 4:03 pm 
 

Harlequin_159 wrote:
baconboom wrote:
These are some lyrics I wrote for DSBM song so there kinda supposed to be melodramatic. Anyway I'm interested to hear any comments on them, positive or negative.

Pestilence prevails
Bleakness consumed
The most sickening memories exhumed
Demons come
Never go
My life
Away I throw!
Fate wraps it’s thorns around my neck,
Faith stabs it’s horns into my back! (2)
A life worth losing
A mind worth concealing
Torn apart
By this wretched feeling
Death, I yearn for
Bittersweet pity
I earn of course
Fate wraps it’s thorns around my neck,
Faith stabs it’s horns into my back! (2)
Weak, feeble and dying
Dead, crying and lying
I scream in pain
All suffering in vain
A blade offers temporary release
But still this pain won’t cease
But still I endure this mountain of mournfulness
But still I carry on through this desert of sorrows
For my time is not now
Though I yearn for it to be
Finally through blackened eyes I see.


I honestly think these are a cut above the typical DSBM lyrics, something about the rhyming as well as the chorus just really sits well with me


Thanks! That's great to hear. I put a lot of effort and emotion in to them, to be honest I was worried about posting them because they're so personal. I'm only 14 years old but I've been going through some tough stuff lately, so I decided to start a DSBM project called "Hollow Lives", as self therapy.
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skibolky
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 10, 2015 9:58 pm 
 

Lost at sea lyrics

give us a signal captain
we have lost our way
we have nothing left to do
but fucking pray
The tides forever changing
Mirages fade away
Like sirens of the desert
you'll forever stray
Nothing left to fear
nothing left to hide
These traits are for the weak
We set aside
Like fallen ones before us
We decide to come to
This life!
We tried!
Our horizons fading
No land in sight
Navigations failing
Fucking right
We can't decipher our way
Only hope now is nomaste
we only want
A way out
Can't navigate
drunk on stout
Dehydration!
Is a bitch!

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BURlAL
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 24, 2015 4:00 pm 
 

This was born while listening to Mr Danzig so assume its a bluesy doomy thing....


White Widow


Here she comes
Skin turned white
Dressed in black
Dark as night

Blood is pumping
Pumping cold
Beware the bite
of the White Widow

She is Walking
Walking slow
Eyes all alight
With a ghostly glow

Season of suffer
Suffer and woe
Because this night
Brings the White Widow

The wind it whispers
whispers her name
Back to the depths
From which she came

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EatenbyWolves
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Joined: Fri Feb 06, 2015 1:06 am
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Location: Norway
PostPosted: Wed Nov 04, 2015 2:54 am 
 

guys, I took a disney song and made in satanic. please let me know how it is. thank you.

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You think I'm an ignorant savage
And you've been to so many churches
I guess it must be so
But still I cannot see
If the savage one is me
How can there be so much that you don't know
You don't know

You think you own whatever land you land on
The pagan soil is something you can claim
But I know every rock and tree and creature
Has a life, has a spirit, has a name

You think the only people who are people
Are the people who look and think like you
But if you walk the footsteps of a stranger
You'll learn things you never knew, you never knew

Have you ever heard the wolf prey under the full moon
Or asked the grinning bear why he grinned
Can you chant the secret hymns of Satan
Can you hear the christian screams in the wind
Can you hear the christian screams in the wind

Come run the hidden pine trails of the forest
Come taste the forbidden fruits of the Earth
Come forfeit all the riches upon you
And witness the infernal rebirth

The thunder and hades are my brothers
odin and judas are my friends
And we are all connected to each other
In a circle, in a hoop that never ends

How high will the blood flow
If you congregate here, then you'll soon know
And you'll hear the wolf prey under the full moon
For whether we are of white or copper skin
We need to chant the secret hymns of Satan
We need to hear the christian screams in the wind

You can own the sheep and still
All you'll own is sheep until
You can hear the christian screams in the wind

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MindsDoor
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 13, 2015 7:33 pm 
 

Ravage this name
Remember, anyone at all?
Fragmented memory
Personas constantly fall

Time to write it off
Time to suffocate it

Receive the cure for this
Revive the thousand deaths
Reanimate the abandoned ones
Redo what has been wrought

Ravage this name
Remember, anyone at all?
Fragmented memory
Personas constantly fall

Time to write it off
Time to suffocate it

You reap what you sow

Am I doomed not to know? (x2)

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EatenbyWolves
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 13, 2015 11:52 pm 
 

Mysterious. I like it :thumbsup:

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MindsDoor
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 13, 2015 11:57 pm 
 

EatenbyWolves wrote:
Mysterious. I like it :thumbsup:

Thanks!

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Megrimmtroll
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 26, 2016 2:36 pm 
 

Hei this is a song been working on, have got music for track. This version I feel is the one I am going to work with, would be interested in feedback. :)

Helgäsðottir Död Jul

Among the northern wastes, where the forest ends. The remaining ripped trees blasted by eternal winds, stands Rannveig staring into the midwinter wilderness snow storm alone.

Her powers alert noting all dark magic. That lives deep in the frozen earth below, Trollgirl Rannveig. Wandered all the forlorn pathways gathering her craft, from tundra like lands. Into the darkening forest of Moorsfest.

Befreinding nature in all its manifestations, esoteric with the immense knowledge. The cold winter forest betrothing its secrets with Rannveig this left her estranged from trollfolk, it could not be quelled.

She spirraled into the abyss of darkness, where light cannot be found. Frightened by her magics! A pale figure meandering lost from her kin, in a snow storm freezing into the void. Her tale ends swallowed by the earth Rannveig protected.

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LordStenhammar
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 29, 2016 8:24 am 
 

Don't write much in English anymore. Far more comfortable using my native tongue. So, spot the grammatical errors!

HER LIFE IN CHRIST
At night the whole monastery echoes
When the wolves inside her howl
To the retrieving light of the narrow windows
She devotes every inch of her soul

All the lust in the world
Could never satisfy her
In celibacy - a betrayal
A life in Christ forever

Painted her lips with menstrual blood
In a mental state kissed a tainted icon
Got embraced by the tentacles of God
Her eyes adored the dead paragon

She prays for her guilt
In a possessed stone hall
Before her there stand
Shapes covered in blood

Prayer and rape, they follow each other
A man with shaking hands approaches her bed
Cultivating her womb with holy semen
On the altar of adultery her body is blessed
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Child_Macerator
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Location: Canada
PostPosted: Sun Mar 13, 2016 10:53 pm 
 

A song I wrote a couple years ago and then recorded in some type of weird unclassifiable genre song.
https://asrikpa666.bandcamp.com/track/this-empty-life-3

~This Empty Life~
Imprisoned Within These Ancient Barriers
The Walls Are Centuries Old But Still Stand Strong
Perched Atop The Mountains
The Carpathian Forest Stands
Watching My Every Move
They Are The Protectors Of The Holy Land
Of Which I Was Once Free To Roam
But No Longer...

The Curse Will Last Forever
This Immortal Hunger
And Eternal Frost
Are The Only Things
I Feel
In This Empty Life

I Am A Desolate Spirit
Travelling A Long Forgotten Road
Taking The Path Of Misery
Searching For The Life I Once Lived

Im An Uninhabited Corridor
Absent Of Any Lively Essence
Vampyric Dependencies
Sanguine Is My Thought

The Curse Will Last For As Long As I Breathe
This Eternal Thirst
And Eerie Cold
I Have Experienced
The Deepest Solitude
I Feel Nothing
But The Pain
In This Empty Life

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Location: Germany
PostPosted: Wed Mar 30, 2016 9:19 am 
 

I have something here that should vaguely hint at the gerne I want to make. Please tell me if it indeed does have that effect. (Hint: I intentionally left out the word "nuclear" to make it a bit harder)



Incantation of the prince of darkness in a thousand tongues of blasphemy spitting hellfire into the unholy dominion of this rotten anti-existence to sodomize the goatbitch into everlasting antichristian submission!!!

Aaaargh!
Bestial brutalization of the underworld Kingdom of the eternal master of the bloodspilling night of the blades of horned glory!!
Black putrescence fueled by the sadomasochistic whip of luciferian sacrifice unleashes the absolute rage of the pentagram!!
Hordes of the nocturnal thunder storm the universal fabric with steel from the black pyre of the oppopope!!

Bleak visions of thunderous immortal hell crucifixions overcome the alcoholic final judgement of the rotten body of christ.
Judas traitor and saviour devours the flesh of the spawn of maggots in cataclysmic upheaval of the crux of the South!!

You must worship Satan now!!
Ritual death fukk 666!!!
Blood of the holy whore, devilish carnage of evil and hellish underworld unleashed in ultimate Apocalypse of satanic might and demonic malevolence!!!

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Iron Wizard
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 15, 2016 12:22 am 
 

These are the lyrics to a black metal song I wrote called "The Order of Black Hellfire":

The gift has been bestowed upon me
The gift of human essence
Given to man
To follow the black path to enlightenment

Black flames burn dark and cold
Eternally in Hell
Transcendent of death
Hail Satan, the bringer

Hail the dark bringer
Lucifer
Serpent of enlightenment
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GrotesqueCarcass
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Joined: Tue Nov 20, 2012 7:49 pm
Posts: 64
Location: Chile
PostPosted: Sat Jun 25, 2016 11:08 pm 
 

Hi guys, these are the lyrics to a song I wrote for my band, the song's called Coffinlust

I crawl
Cleanse myself of blood
Viscera
Sniffing the corpse's rot
A carcass
That spews a foul essence
Darkness
The night has made it's presence

Moss ridden morgue, somber and lonely
Cold and lifeless, the corpse decays slowly
The sight of intestines made me feel blessed
Enraptured and restless for sinful sex
Licking the sockets while maggots eat away
Fingering crevices, shrouded foreplay
Masturbate with pus, genitalia shred
Drinking the blood while fucking the dead

Unpure
My fixation over carnage
Obscure
My desires ever so carnal
Eviscerated
Entrails with peculiar whiffs
Desecrated
Obscene molestation of the stiffs

Extreme pleasure in mortal sickness
Orgasmic mutilation, arousing and wicked
Postmortem erotica, pornographic death
The sight of dead flesh hardens my breath

Moss ridden morgue, somber and lonely
Cold and lifeless, the corpse decays slowly
The sight of intestines made me feel blessed
Enraptured and restless for sinful sex
Licking the sockets while maggots eat away
Fingering crevices, shrouded foreplay
Masturbate with pus, genitalia shred
Drinking the blood while fucking the dead

Penetrate
Anus ablates in every thrust
Perforate
I lacerate the putrid cunt
Ejaculating
Blackened semen and rust
Satiating
Perverted coffinlust
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Amber Gray
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Posts: 617
PostPosted: Tue Aug 09, 2016 8:17 pm 
 

I think this is how you write atmospheric black metal lyrics

Nameless Ancients
Spoiler: show
The mountain has shed its blood
The rivers have frozen
Deep inside the darkest caves
The empty graves of our gods
And the summit is in clear view
Across the physical planes we dwell
Standing as one with spirit and ice
For we are not held by Earth
Wrapped in the winds of dimensions
And carried to temples bathed in unknown power
Crafted are we by time and death
The flowing streams we’ve bled
And the eternal lakes we’ve filled
Shards of the phantom’s omnipresent skeleton seep into the crust of the world
And we are but vessels
We carry the spirits of nameless ancients


Called to the Celestial Realm of Unparalleled Towers
Spoiler: show
I have been summoned
To the world inside
I have been called
Beyond the land of rocks and soil
I have been challenged
By those of infinite power
I will do battle
Alongside creators of dark realms
And I have been slain
To fulfill the prophecy of man and lord
I will travel
The empty passages of asphyxiation and spiritual frost
I have been summoned
To destroy the Earth body
The halls are lit by unextinguishable flame
Stones resonate with the long since silenced cries of mortals

Soul of the wind
Soul of the sky
Set foot in the pool of black vapors
And remain still and unscathed
For to walk the ethereal path
We must leave this behind
For to shed the form bound by gravity
We must allow the ascension to take place

Now the ritual has begun
And the robed ones of no confinement have gathered in a circle around the prone carcass of humanity
And now begin to remove the limbs
An offer of the three dimensions of man to the shapeless deity
Life and body are disintegrated
As I now wander the vast solitude


Am I on the money
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MammothRider
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Posts: 458
Location: Alberta, Canada
PostPosted: Wed Aug 24, 2016 11:28 am 
 

I came up with this a little while ago, and it's already gone through a couple revisions. I'm fairly new at writing lyrics, so any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Doesn't have a title yet:

Morning breaks as the armies engage
This day will become their last
Knights possessed with a murderous rage
The Earth will soon break from its fast
Blistering Sun beats down upon them
Combatants fight for their kings
Battlefields soaked with the blood of men
Hear the bells of war ring!

Opposing forces occupied
With the bloodshed before their eyes
No time to run, no time to hide
The horrors are upon them, shrieking deathly cries!

Eldritch terrors descend on the men
Rending mortal flesh from bone
It’s far too late, they see it then
The seeds of their deaths have been sewn!

It was on that beautiful, bloody day
That a great rift tore through the void
And Black Spawn from beyond the stars
Swept the Earth like a plague
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omnishadow
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Joined: Sat May 18, 2013 12:19 am
Posts: 240
Location: Brazil
PostPosted: Fri Sep 02, 2016 11:51 am 
 

I made this one at the psychiatric ward, after midnight, ~3 years ago. At the time, I barely knew english, and I were extremely disturbed; having hallucinations and some kind of paranoia with some noises...


The sky is falling apart
But I'll keep the massacre alive
Tormented souls behind me
Can't escape, hide or wake up
Kissing their cold shadows...

My time ain't came yet, and
the world keeps bleeding fire,
lies and ignorance
The time of chaos is coming
Feel the cold deep in your skin
and the blood in your mouth

When the Shadow Lord arise
With my fear... I fear the enlightenment
The souls from Here, smells my silence,
the hate and despair

The actions are taking place to the neuroaudience
Conflicts and terror spreading into this world
Subconscious anomalies for the undead race
Ignorance is gone

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DividerOfShadows
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Joined: Tue Sep 13, 2016 1:58 pm
Posts: 368
Location: Croatia
PostPosted: Tue Sep 13, 2016 4:34 pm 
 

Hey there, guys. If you don't mind, I'd appreciate your opinion on these lyrics. Truth be told, I'm probably not the best at writing these but... oh well, you decide. Any kind of feedback is welcome! And by the way, since I'm Croatian, I've probably made some grammar/spelling mistakes. If you indeed spot an error, don't mind to correct me :-D

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Contour of freedom - just a step away
Whip across the flesh - the only barrier
Where eagles dare but the mortal do not
Far beyond the subconscious, into divinity

Seldom are the means of transport found
Breathtaking delights not for every eye to see
Wandering in hallucinations - blinded by hope
This marks the day of coronation
He Who Abandoned the Spawn reigns supreme

In torment and torture - long for the skies
Deluded by promise - kneel by the symbols
Foreshadowing the demise - world crumbling because of lies
An outcast, a leech - nothing less of a plaguewielder

Indigenous thoughts - shielding sanity
Rose on first touch - a trenchant dagger in disguise
If I am to dwell here - how can I set myself free?
How can I open up my eyes - if I'm blind to the future?
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simonitro
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Joined: Thu Apr 08, 2004 3:41 pm
Posts: 334
Location: Vancouver, BC, Canada
PostPosted: Sun Oct 02, 2016 12:24 am 
 

One of, if not, the most fucked up lyrics I've written:

Dismembered Come My Lover

She finally knows the truth...

(Musical Intro)

Once upon a time
It was love at first sight
Perfection was this romance
Everything going so right

At nights,
He goes off to work
Feeling insecure
She knows it all deep

There might be another one
In which he seems to betray
Leave her behind and no fun
Arrives the very next day

Suspicious the lady
She seems to know
Young man is shady
Apprehensive did grow

Scent of another woman
Stenched on his body
Biting her own hands
Started to know the truth
HE BECAME HER ENEMY

Demon conquers her mind
Hatred drove her mad
With anger she is blind
MORE THAN SHE HAD

VENGEANCE BURNING HER SOUL
SHE WILL SERVE HIM WELL
LOSING ALL CONTROL
TONIGHT...
...SHE'LL SHOW HIM HELL

HELL!!!

(Guitar Solo 1)

As he arrives home
Sitting like a demon
Awaiting her prey

She served him dinner
Surprised as he smiles
"Hello there, darling!"

"You must be tired
Hungry at least
Come down dear
And have your feast!"

The man starts to eat
Unknown of the dangers
Awaiting for him
Started to weaken
And goes to...
...sleep

"It shall begin, my love!"

(Guitar Solo 2)

As he awakes
Tied to the bed
Chains around his hands
And legs

Standing in front of him
He cannot move
"I know your sins
You shall pay the price"

He laughs and ridicules
As the flames rising from within
"My sweetheart such a fool
I know all...
...IT SHALL BEGIN!"

Grabs the hammer
And smashes on his leg
Screaming in agony
Nowhere to escape

Whacks the other leg
His bones are weakened
Grabbing two bear traps
And clenches into his skin
Bleeding from his shins
The pain start to feel

She comes forth and give a kiss
Such a satisfying bliss
Betrayal shall lose his touch
AS SHE GRABS THE HAMMER...
...AND DESTROYS HIS CROTCH

THE SCREAMS
THE PAIN
THE AGONY
THE MISERY

"I give it all in
WITH PASSION AND LOVE!!"

(Guitar Solo 3)

She grabs her high heels
Smashing it on the head
Breaking bones from the skull
As he start bleeding red
It's time to end his life
"I'm your pure loving wife"
She grabs the kitchen knife
Stabs him six times to the head
As he, finally, ends up dead...

...he dies...

(Musical Interlude)

Now, he's long dead and gone
It's still not enough for her
The blood thirst still on
Died and without a care

She gets the axe from the cabin
Chopping off his arms and legs
Buries his body parts
In every section of the house
Her laughing and crying start
Satisfaction deep within
She tore all his muscles and skin

Breaks all his ribs
And takes out his heart
As the blood still drips
She places it in a jar

Puts it on a shelf of her room
After the night of terror and doom
"Everything went great as you see
Forever...
...your loving heart belongs to me!"

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Judgment Day

The sky or the fire
One way or the other
Enter lust and desire
There is no another

Chances are all gone
Awaiting for the hammer
You are on your own
Walking to the altar

Time over
No savior
Next in line
Denied

(Chorus)

You've been judged
For sins you beheld
Here comes the just
When you fall to hell


Consequential actions
For every move you make
Life dies in fractions
For the sins you break

Engulf in fiery fate
Fear in the eyes
As the blade shall wait
No more disguise

No turning back
Flames on attack
Time is closing in
Gates shall open

(Chorus)

(Guitar Solo)

Time over
No savior
Next in line
Denied

No place to hide
Those gates opening wide

(Chorus)
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BURlAL
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Joined: Fri May 21, 2010 11:32 pm
Posts: 414
PostPosted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 9:46 am 
 

alone
on a cold dark morning
emotions haunting and fragmented
twisted like an old dead oak
sorrow
where once was joy
this lonely soul
now shrouded in ashes of regret
night comes closer
a solitary wolf howls
echoing cries of a lost lover
the weight of memories
crushing
down upon me
not unlike lead tears
another slash
filled with shame
another dose
to dull the pain
oh how i wish
oh how i wish
you were here with me now
as my soul turns cold
as my soul turns cold
bury me in snow


Was going to title this 'Under the Old Oak' until I saw it was basically a Candlemass title.

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Iron Wizard
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Joined: Mon Jun 15, 2015 11:21 pm
Posts: 135
PostPosted: Tue Nov 08, 2016 2:31 pm 
 

I haven't really thought of a title for this song yet, but here are the lyrics:

The storm has abated
The tempest from the ancient abyss
Replaced by puny thoughts of heaven
Destroyed by ignorance

The gates of Hell have been closed
The brazen key now lost
Fallen forth from the darkness
Dreams of death now destroy life

What once was is gone
Raging flames shall bring it back
Gods of power, life, and wisdom
Return from the open gates of Hell

It's intended to be a black metal song. Let me know what you think.
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Immerse
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Joined: Sun Jun 05, 2016 5:23 am
Posts: 50
Location: Greece
PostPosted: Thu Feb 23, 2017 6:38 am 
 

untitled

Facing all my fears,
in the form of the reality,
Where evrybody thinks about the future,
I´m the one who does not!
*sloppy guitar solo*


My thoughts are driving me to crimes.
torturing the gulity lies,
after all i know,
my insanity´s high,
And the second though i make might be even worse!
*shredy guitar solo over some fast double bass*

*guitars and bass stops*
Speech:
The second one,
makes me think of an attack,
evrything i do makes an impact.
*speech ends*
No one thought that i,
´m causing the rivers,
to turn red,
even after that many years.
The generation X,
makes me twist the facts,
that should stay down,
after those long years.
Facing all my fears,
the fears of truth,
being uncovered.

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PETERG
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Joined: Sat Jun 20, 2015 1:48 pm
Posts: 36
Location: Greece
PostPosted: Sat Apr 01, 2017 12:19 pm 
 

I have some lyrics that i wrote for my black metal project :

The song is called " Howl to the moon of starvation"


As the cold tries to tear up my skin
I succumb to my uselessness
Easing and alleviating the pain is not the solution... erase the pain
by erasing me
They never show any mercy for inferiority... I should have known considered that
The unified army does not tolerate.
And how did they punished me?
They did not tortured me nor did they kill me

They left me behind... unable to withstand the weight of my weapons. Wolves start to scream... frozen leaves are falling on the white soil
And my need for blood grows bigger. They denied me... the happiness of dying like a hero

Now howl to the moon
Say my name
ΕΦΙΑΛΤΗΣ (Efialtis)
Now I shall guide the enemy through the passage of treason

Sorry for my awful English and my grammar mistakes. I tried to make them as less generic as possible.
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ppf22
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Joined: Mon Apr 03, 2017 8:19 pm
Posts: 1
PostPosted: Mon Apr 03, 2017 8:42 pm 
 

I helped myself with google since I don't usually speak english and even in my own vocabulary I don't know many words, therefore I lack associations as well

Listened to Marilyn Manson and yeah


smithered .. smithereen, smithered sounds better to me so I kept it, even tho the red ruler crap shows up :P


Shut down,
wipe your smithered proposal,
shut down,
a whole entity dissolving,
sharp tongue,
I shall greet you with those words,
shut down,
shut u~up!

towels stuck in, ears sought color,
by means of honor, bring more horror
It reads on stop signs a feast show forwards
cover your creed or you'll abide
what's bare harm, my summer sunshine
feel the knuckles plowing their way hard on
crescent offer, prowess to toast for
coupled with moths, no scene of a soap opera

Shut down,
wipe your smithered proposal,
shut down,
your whole entity dissolving,
sharp tongue,
I shall greet you with those words,
shut down,
shut u~up!

carnival of misfits, cheers run rampant to disclose
that any sight you behold is sunset for the bold
forest caretaker, your overbearing nature
discover how innards taste h-ah!

be the witness, why can't you see
your only business is the threats you appease
when you disappear/when you disperse with air (- depends on the way you read)

Shut down,
wipe your smithered proposal,
shut down,
your whole entity dissolving,
sharp tongue,
never four minutes late to,
shut down,
shut u~up!

hurdle of tantrums, shattering winds,
wild synthesis, taverns are fretting
thy neighbor is thy enemy
rinse with the sunshine, keep up the knife
chisel the dues, and bristles on thighs
masterful beverage for us to indulge in
boastful as it seeps, boast as it seeps

in an ounce of cowardice the freckles are robed
bags are knotted up, bubbles resurface
your ode was to listen, not to bring complaints

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